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Trunks · 04-03-2006, 08:00 PM

[quote="[DAS REICH] Blitz":207b5]I read it, he could fiddle with some of the adjectives(his voice was getting raspier, i find that awkward to read) and maybe find alternatives to the word "He"(only in situations where he repeats them over and over, but maybe he wants to get an effect using it over and over so meh)..but very good, now gimme +1[/quote:207b5]Ok, cool. Thanks man, its appreciated. +1 when i get the chance.

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Trunks is Offline Senior Member Posts: 1,410 Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: USA	04-03-2006, 08:00 PM [quote="[DAS REICH] Blitz":207b5]I read it, he could fiddle with some of the adjectives(his voice was getting raspier, i find that awkward to read) and maybe find alternatives to the word "He"(only in situations where he repeats them over and over, but maybe he wants to get an effect using it over and over so meh)..but very good, now gimme +1[/quote:207b5]Ok, cool. Thanks man, its appreciated. +1 when i get the chance.