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Default I need some help writing something - 09-25-2005, 11:25 PM

I applied for a job that is in Manitoba (I'm in Ontario), and the position I have applied for is no longer available but they emailed my and asked if I was interested in an assistant manager position. Now I am stuck writing an email asking about the wage. This is where I need your help. How do I do it? This is what I have so far (I am being upfront about everything because of the distance and, so basically I want to know what kind of wage there looking at and what the wage will be like in the future, also benefits and bonus's.)

I would be interested in the assistant manager position. I have no experience with sales at all but what ever I put my mind to I can accomplish. Most of my skills I have required are hand on work with a lot of problem solving involved. I have a few questions about the position.

· What would the day-to-day responsibilities be?
· What would you say are the top priorities of this job?
· How will performance be measured and how often?
· Can you tell me more about the person I would report to?
· Where might this position lead?
· What is it like to work there?



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Default 09-25-2005, 11:44 PM

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-I'd like inquire about the salary/benefits
Theres kind more to it than just that, there has to be. something that is atleast a paragraph long.
  
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Default 09-25-2005, 11:57 PM

I wouldn't ask until you know more about the position. That's kind of the etiquette of interviewing/job hunting. Find out if you're interested in the work before you ask about the pay.

You can probably get an idea of what the pay should be like here:

[url:66d5f]http://www.salary.com[/url:66d5f]
  
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Default 09-26-2005, 12:51 AM

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I wouldn't ask until you know more about the position. That's kind of the etiquette of interviewing/job hunting. Find out if you're interested in the work before you ask about the pay.

You can probably get an idea of what the pay should be like here:

[url:0bf21]http://www.salary.com[/url:0bf21]
The salary is a big part of all of this, I will be moving 3000Km if everything works out, I need to know because I will have to calculate what it is going to cost just to get started living on my own. I can not live off of $20,000 a year, $30,000+ I could live off of for a year or two at that wage. The job I was going for started at $30,000 but after 3 or 4 years, salary would be $60,000+

I just dont want to screw things up I guess happy:
  
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Default Re: I need some help writing something - 09-26-2005, 07:48 AM

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I applied for a job that is in Manitoba (I'm in Ontario), and the position I have applied for is no longer available but they emailed my and asked if I was interested in an assistant manager position. Now I am stuck writing an email asking about the wage. This is where I need your help. How do I do it? This is what I have so far (I am being upfront about everything because of the distance and, so basically I want to know what kind of wage there looking at and what the wage will be like in the future, also benefits and bonus's.)

I would be interested in the assistant manager position. I have no experience with sales at all but what ever I put my mind to I can accomplish. Most of my skills I have required are hand on work with a lot of problem solving involved. I have a few questions about the position.

· What would the day-to-day responsibilities be?
· What would you say are the top priorities of this job?
· How will performance be measured and how often?
· Can you tell me more about the person I would report to?
· Where might this position lead?
· What is it like to work there?



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Write them back something like the following.....

[quote:4dbc0]Thank you for your interest in my resume. I am interested in the assistant manager position and hope that a personal or phone interview can be scheduled to discuss the position and my qualifications. Thanks in advance for your consideration and I look forward to speaking with you.[/quote:4dbc0]

Whether you use this or something similar, don't use the example that you provided. You start off by stating that you have no experience. Bad move. The "whatever I put my mind to" stuff, sounds trite. You need to draw on some past experience that was somewhat sales related and spin it, however that is interview stuff. You don't need to go into that in a reply to their e-mail. They are obviously interested, there is no sense in turning them off. The second sentence needs a lot of work, and again, save it for the interview. This sounds more like cover letter material. Sounds to me like you foot is already in the door.

Your questions are pretty solid and you should consider asking some of these as well, but wait for an interview.

- Is this a new position or has the person in the position moved on/promoted
- What are the benefits
- What is the salary/commissions[/quote]
  
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